is this proper english?I am writing a science review article. This is the title i want to use. Is the grammer correct with the syntax of "and" 2 times in 1 sentence?Pathophysiology, diagnosis, and treatment of chronic kidney disease and its complications.
Posted by DallasDude52
Good start!
I'd throw a simi-colon in there if it was me! And if it's a Title, I'd throw a capital on all the major words
Pathophysiology; the Diagnosis and Treatment of Chronic Kidney Disease and its Complications.
Posted by Honey
It is a little lengthy for a title. It works better as a sub-title.
i.e.
Kidney Pathophysiology:
The diagnosis and treatment of chronic kidney disease and its complications
Posted by Ask And I Shall Answer !!
"The Pathophysiology, Diagnosis, Treatment, and Complications of Chronic Kidney Disease."
I just changed the order a bit.
Posted by ?
its a little long. Thank about this...If it is talking about treatment, then the complications would be treated, right? So you kinda have complications in there twice. So remove "and its complications" and it should be fine.
Posted by Gwennaford
Honey's syntax is correct. I agree with Dallas' suggestion for title capitalization, but not the semicolon, because Pathophysiology is not limited to kidneys.
Complications and their treatments vary and are not always treated along with the disease. For example, diseased kidneys do not CAUSE atherosclerosis and heart disease, but "Cardiovascular complications are a major clinical problem in patients WITH chronic kidney disease and end-stage renal failure."
http://content.karger.com/ProdukteDB/produkte.asp?Doi=90182
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